Wednesday, April 22, 2009

Poetry month continues...

I'm trying to write a couple of poems a week in honor of National Poetry Month. Here's my attempt at writing a pantoum. I'm not sure about the title. Usually, I like to use one word titles. This is a new form for me. I'm in unchartered waters. Hopefully, I won't sink :)

Scraped by Love

Clear those clouds away
Rain will refresh again
Core will reignite
Joy hides in corners

Rain will refresh again
Peel away doubt
Joy hides in corners
Craft another you

Peel away doubt
Embrace the embers
Craft another you
Others to treasure

Shelve former self
Core will reignite
Power through loss
Clear those clouds away

20 comments:

Mari said...

I know nothing about poetry and have never heard of a pantoum but I like this one!

Mommy's Nintendo said...

This is wonderful! I'm not familiar with pantoums. Maybe I'll do a little research and try to write one too.

G said...

Interesting.

Thanks for the poem.

shabby girl said...

I'm not familiar with this type of poem either, but you did a fine job. I have reinvented myself in just that way a few times!

Wendy said...

reminds me of how i feel after a breakup, your words are so strong.

Kim said...

I think the images here are quite powerful. I love the idea of peeling away doubts, shelving old selves. It sounds like a starting over story or deciding to be happy amid bad circumstances. you really have a way of evoking some heavy emotions.

The Write Girl said...

Hey Septembermom,

Glad you tried the pantoum!! That is awesome. You got the form pretty down packed. I'm so happy you tried it!!! And nice poem : )

Joanne said...

On a different level, I see Spring parallels here, new life, rebirth, joy. Very nice!

LyN said...

Kelly, great poem. oh, btw, check out def jam poetry. look out for this guy named Shihan. his delivery of all his poems just blows my mind away. :)

Dani said...

This is lovely. I've never written a pantoum. Maybe I should. :)

T Rex Mom said...

As always, love it when you post your poems. Thanks for sharing!

Cassi said...

Very nice. What a powerful line... "craft another you" and "joy hides in corners" is so hopeful. Thanks for sharing. :)

Michelle said...

Hmmm... I thought I had the pantoum figured out but ... I don't. I did love this one though. Great phrasing!

Sneaky Momma said...

You're so talented. :)

pughy said...

Love your way of saying that, it is lovely. I am no good with poetry, but think you did that wery well. Thank you for sharing.

Hugs GJ and Carol x

Debbie said...

I feel like I am clueless about poetry but I do know that I like this one!

Becca said...

I love your poems!

thezeninyou said...

Amazing...very well written!

H.K. said...

I felt like this was a poem of renewal, of starting over again, of letting go of yesterday's mistakes. I loved it! It is definitely a poem of HOPE.

Gerri said...

Great poem. I think you did not sink at all. ;)