I'm trying to write a couple of poems a week in honor of National Poetry Month. Here's my attempt at writing a pantoum. I'm not sure about the title. Usually, I like to use one word titles. This is a new form for me. I'm in unchartered waters. Hopefully, I won't sink :)
Scraped by Love
Clear those clouds away
Rain will refresh again
Core will reignite
Joy hides in corners
Rain will refresh again
Peel away doubt
Joy hides in corners
Craft another you
Peel away doubt
Embrace the embers
Craft another you
Others to treasure
Shelve former self
Core will reignite
Power through loss
Clear those clouds away
20 comments:
I know nothing about poetry and have never heard of a pantoum but I like this one!
This is wonderful! I'm not familiar with pantoums. Maybe I'll do a little research and try to write one too.
Interesting.
Thanks for the poem.
I'm not familiar with this type of poem either, but you did a fine job. I have reinvented myself in just that way a few times!
reminds me of how i feel after a breakup, your words are so strong.
I think the images here are quite powerful. I love the idea of peeling away doubts, shelving old selves. It sounds like a starting over story or deciding to be happy amid bad circumstances. you really have a way of evoking some heavy emotions.
Hey Septembermom,
Glad you tried the pantoum!! That is awesome. You got the form pretty down packed. I'm so happy you tried it!!! And nice poem : )
On a different level, I see Spring parallels here, new life, rebirth, joy. Very nice!
Kelly, great poem. oh, btw, check out def jam poetry. look out for this guy named Shihan. his delivery of all his poems just blows my mind away. :)
This is lovely. I've never written a pantoum. Maybe I should. :)
As always, love it when you post your poems. Thanks for sharing!
Very nice. What a powerful line... "craft another you" and "joy hides in corners" is so hopeful. Thanks for sharing. :)
Hmmm... I thought I had the pantoum figured out but ... I don't. I did love this one though. Great phrasing!
You're so talented. :)
Love your way of saying that, it is lovely. I am no good with poetry, but think you did that wery well. Thank you for sharing.
Hugs GJ and Carol x
I feel like I am clueless about poetry but I do know that I like this one!
I love your poems!
Amazing...very well written!
I felt like this was a poem of renewal, of starting over again, of letting go of yesterday's mistakes. I loved it! It is definitely a poem of HOPE.
Great poem. I think you did not sink at all. ;)
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