Thursday, April 8, 2010
Poetry Quickfire
Rumbling
Sometimes the quiet
pushes the battle forward.
That observant sentinel
forced to be mute.
Sometimes the familiar
bombards the hostage truth.
That ordinary regiment
demanded the usual salute.
Sometimes the living
releases the freedom cry.
That faltering surrender
raised the flag of truce.
I penned this poem while waiting at the bus stop this afternoon. I recently saw a movie about that painful silence which can plague a marriage. I guess that's what triggered this poem. Thanks for reading.
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Wow! I really enjoy your "quickfires." What was the movie?
bel, it was actually "Ordinary People." You can feel the tension tearing away at the marriage and the family. Very tragic in many ways.
I thought you were being patriotic... I totally pictured a fight on battlefield and images of American Reveloution. I never would have guessed it was about a failing marriage. But that's the beauty of your poetry.... you can imagine what you like because your words take us away to far away places. Beautiful job
Wow, a wonderful poem and thought up at a bus stop, A real pleasure to read.
Yvonne.
I love that you wrote it at a bus stop - profound thoughts even when performing ordinary tasks.
For a quickfire that is very good.. Hope things are looking up for you.. LOve Carol and GJ x
Isn't it wonderful when one art form inspires another? Nice film to verse connection here.
Amazing.
I love the little surprises that come with your poetry quickfires! I am always happy to see the words when I check on who's been posting what in the blogs I read.
I also love that the inspiration came while you were waiting for the bus. Sometimes the best inspiration comes in the most "normal" moments.
Happy thoughts and prayers out in the universe for you! **hugs**
Lovely!
The very first stanza reminds me of this, something I fully believe in:
Sometimes the one with the most to say isn't the loud one in front.
You seriously need to make a book of your poems. I read that and immediately thought of those strained silences that happen in most marriages from time to time. Your talent is amazing, dear.
The fact that you can communicate so immensely with your words of poetry in the short amount of time it takes to wait for a child at a bus stop is absolutely amazing to me! What a gift you have!!
Beautiful poem, and illustrates something that (mildly) plagues our marriage sometimes. I will often say "If you don't talk to me, I will lose my mind from talking to a 2 year old all day!"
One day, you're going to put all of these quickfires in book form, right? So provoking. I cannot tell you how many moments I've had where it's actually the quiet that makes the battle rage. There's something about non-communication that gets me all fired up.
I like the interplay of restraint and yearning.
Kelly, you paint with words so well!
Praying for a breakthrough for you guys...
Beautiful words. I too have been reading and hearing a lot about relationships faltering and breaking. I will be posting my thoughts on that as well. Funny how poetry fits situations... or is it situations fitting poetry... Words come and we have to write them down... You are a poet of the soul and a woman of great spirit. May you and yours forever be Blessed. Love and Light, Nina P
I love your imagery on this one. Very well done!!!!
There is powerful imagery in this poem...you have quite the writing gift. Have a lovely weekend.
That was beautiful. Well, so long as it was the marriage in the movie you were talking about and not YOUR movie! This was definitely some moving poetry.
Dear Kelly,
NAMASTE!
Good Morning!
Well expressed poem!I too start thinking about the lines on the way to office or inbetween work.I started observing surroundings and so much to learn!
Keep writing.
Sasneham,
Anu
Enigmatic enough to capture the silence that can invade a relationship. (I like the battle allusions as well.)
Wow, I din't get the whole silence and marriage thing until I read it again. Then it clicked.
Very good.
I have never been very good at poetry, writing it, reading it or understanding it. :0) However, like Vickie, I totally understood it once I went back and read it again. You're amazing.
Praying for you, my friend.
{{HUGS}}
Teresa <><
Beautiful, Kelly! I sooo love these Quickfires.
captures the energy well. so impressed... at the busstop!
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