Monday, May 16, 2011

Flash Fiction

Gustave Courbet - "Jo, The Beautiful Irish Girl" 1866


A 55 word flash fiction piece inspired by the painting above:

Was she not more than this reflection? His compliments circled her, but his heart sent chills. Discussions of her future hushed when she returned to the kitchen. If only she could push her heels deep into the sod and push away dependance on him, she would breathe again. He talked of America; she craved self.

Thanks for reading!

18 comments:

the wild magnolia said...

More, I want "the rest of the story". Yes?

the wild magnolia said...

More, I want "the rest of the story". Yes?

Diane said...

A sad existence for now.... holding out hope for her future. :O)

Michelle said...

This one needs to be blown out more. I like it!

Robyn Campbell said...

Oh this is really good and sadly how a lot of women are treated. Love it, Kel. Hey I agree with the others, this has the makings of a novel. (After boy books are completed.) Whew, you'ze has a lot of work to do. Makes me tired just thinking about it. :-)

Judy Croome said...

I think you've captured in words exactly what the artist captured in her eyes: a sense of longing, a yearning and mostly a deep sadness.

Very good piece...and definitely the kernel of a novel!
Judy, South Africa

welcome to my world of poetry said...

An excellent write as always Kelly, wish I could write like this.

Take care.
Yvonne.

Jenners said...

Wow. So much in such a short little story. Fits the picture perfectly. Very well done.

T Rex Mom said...

For some reason my computer won't let me view the photo. However, I feel like I can imagine it in my head based on your words. Thank you.

Valerie said...

You have the makings of a great story here. I need to know more, Kelly.

Charlotte (Life's a Charm!) said...

Oh so poignant. My heart breaks for her!

Kim said...

Wow, my friend. The sadness and yearning you've depicted in so few words. Well, I'm in awe!

Louisiana Belle said...

You really are gifted with words. So much conveyed in just a few sentences.

Ken Devine said...

I enjoyed that!

Teresha@Marlie and Me said...

the painting is so haunting and your words captured that spirit perfectly!

Flory said...

This is great! So much emotion, reflection, desire... Beautifully written!

Joanne said...

You've beautifully captured such a huge story with few words. And it perfectly matches the expression in the painting!

Hope you're having a good May, lots of fun things going on, definitely!

Gerri said...

So sad and I'm hopeful for her.