Monday, February 7, 2011

Microfiction Monday

It's Microfiction Monday over at stony river. We are invited to write a short, short story based on a select picture in 140 characters (including punctuation and spacing).

He tore away at her worn shield. Anita knew that anger cloaked his face. Her back dented the shade. A 2:45 call from her lover would ring.

Thanks for reading!

45 comments:

John's comments said...

12 minutes to go!

Priyanka Bhowmick said...

loved the rhythm... goof MFM!

He & Me + 3 said...

Love this from just that picture. Awesome job.

Grandma's Goulash said...

How quickly you set the scene for this one. I want to know more.

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Jim said...

Oh S.Mom, I hope she can back into that shade far enough to hide just those few more minutes until her lover can rescue her.
Soooooo very good! :)
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Oh yes, I like you Cezanne's that show up at the right. I showed a C├ęzanne original in the Lautrec Museum in Albi, France, on my blog last Wednesday.
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welcome to my world of poetry said...

As usual very well done.

Yvonne.

Diane said...

Yours always gets me thinking. Hope your week is starting out good. :O)

Dominic de Mattos said...

Hi Kelly

Great one today. Well done :)

:Dom

Lisa Ricard Claro said...

The countdown begins! Nice take on the picture.

Anyes said...

What a suspense! I love it

Peggy said...

I love the suspense of this one.
Great fun! I want more.

Pat said...

Great, suspenseful Microfiction today! I love it. Good for a soap opera!

Caroline said...

Oh my...you always amaze me with your micro fiction stories! I just love this!

hope said...

Can she wait that long? Can we? :)

christy rose said...

I love it as usual!! :)

Dianne said...

wonderful drama
so much in so few words

Karen said...

Intriguing! Hope your week is off to a great start! :>

Susan Fobes said...

This made me stop and think... Intriguing!

Jenners said...

I love that this story really made me look at the photo. Nicely done.

Bill ~ {The Old Fart} said...

Could one say all good things come to those who wait. Great Microfiction

Michelle said...

Lots and lots of images there. I think you need to expand on it some more!

getyourselfconnected said...

Nice!

Elizabeth Mueller said...

"Her back dented the shade." Whoa! Great imagery! Love the fresh writing!

♥.•*¨ Elizabeth ¨*•.♥

Pooch said...

Amazing thriller in so few words! Quite a feat! Brava!

Melanie Sherman said...

I totally see the crinkled shade. Whew. Good job.

T Rex Mom said...

Oooh - deep. Glad you didn't have jury duty otherwise we might not have this to read!

Michael G-G said...

Countdowns are almost very effective--in fiction!

Nice tension.

Have a great week.

Deborah said...

I want to know more ... very well done! :o)

Dan said...

He was late and he just knew the headmaster would keep him after school.

Rekha said...

But did he call? That's an answer we all like to know...good MF :)

indicaspecies said...

Drama and suspense! I like it.

jabblog said...

Yikes! The tension mounts . . .

Vicky said...

Wow, who knew suspense could build in so few words? Nicely done... and um, she will be okay, right?

Margaret said...

Great! I love how you did this by asking yourself "what is going on inside the building".

Teresha@Marlie and Me said...

This one is so scandalous!

H.K. said...

You are really really good at being descriptive in your writing!

Gerri said...

Bravo. I may have said this before, but it's true, I love your mind!!

Kim said...

Now you have my attention! You have a gift for setting a scene Kelly!

By the way, I have been playing around with Picnik, the photoshop-like program. It can make just about any picture look good! But thanks for the compliments on my photography skills!

Donna B said...

Excellent job! Nothing like leaving us on the edge of our seats! What happened? What happened?

gaelikaa said...

Hope it all worked out!

Learn, Laugh, Cook said...

Wow, so different than what I was thinking! :-) I immediately thought of Back to the Future and the line about "SAVE THE CLOCK TOWER!" LOL! You always inspire me to think/dig deeper though. Thanks Kelly, have a great week!

Mandy

Ms.Daisy said...

This is very good...would not have thought of a mystery, although the building does give one a creepy feeling...


~Jean

Debbie said...

Excellent take on that photo!

Madeleine said...

Very dramatic microfiction! Great stuff :O)

Robyn Campbell said...

Bravo! More, I must have more. That is part of a story, Kel. I can see it in my minds eye. :)