Monday, November 15, 2010

Microfiction Monday

It's Microfiction Monday over at stony river. We are invited to write a short, short story based on a specific picture in 140 characters or less (including punctuation and spacing).

Done with all that ego, Ana stomped over to clueless Luis. “Three hours of walking and still nowhere! Get that guy and ask for directions!”

45 comments:

Vicky said...

I love it... ha, "clueless Luis..." awesome!

glnroz said...

women and making their men ask for directions,, lololo

Dominic de Mattos said...

Teehee. A man asking for directions? No wonder Ana is tearing her hair out!
Thanks for the smile, Kelly!!
:D om

Kim said...

Oh boy is this familiar! I looked at this photo prompt over at Stony River and had no idea how to incorporate it into such a short story. You always amaze me with your creativity!

T Rex Mom said...

Why are men like that? My hubby cringes any time I say I'll just stop and ask for directions. It saves so much time. That's too funny!

Vicki Munn said...

ana just better ask for the directions herself... :)

Diane said...

Cute one! Get some directions already!!! ;O)

Pat said...

Ah, men--They just hate to ask for directions, no matter what country or culture they're in! You illustrated a universal truth here! Great job!

articlesoffaithandfancy said...

Ah, Luis and that ego! :)

Kay L. Davies said...

I love "done with all that ego" -- I know the feeling!!
Good one.
-- K

Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel

Valerie said...

Loved this, Kelly. I thought my man was the only one who hated asking ... well, anything really.

the wild magnolia said...

Clever take and writing on Poncho Man. "Done with all that ego." Brilliant!

sylviamorice said...

LOL. I doubt that he will give in just yet...would go against his 'manliness'!!! Loved your take...
Cheers!

fiction-books said...

Hi Kelly,
What a great take on the story, that's some imagination you have, wish I could see the extraordinary, in the ordinary!!

Bill ~ {The Old Fart} said...

Maybe Clueless Luis should have charged up the GPS.

Dan said...

Although the last water was 40 miles ago, Jorge could not bring himself to remove his hip waders.

izzy said...

I hope she is dressed better than he is ! yup gotta have those directions! Fun!

Peggy said...

...and men hate to ask for directions.
Good luck to both of them. Good take on this weeks picture.

Teresha@Marlie and Me said...

This is my favorite image for MM so far and you did it justice!

Dianne said...

fantastic!!
any woman who has ever travelled anywhere with a man know this to be true
wonderful :)

libithina said...

it's always the way :)

Susan Fobes said...

This was probably the most unique this week-great job!

Lisa Ricard Claro said...

All dressed up and nowhere to go! Typical man. Too bad he doesn't have a GPS under that cape. LOL Love your take on this!

Pooch said...

Wonderful concept!! I, too, was thinking GPS!

:)

Joanne said...

Love your men and directions take on this one :)

Jim said...

I love it, Mom! :) I have my doubts that he will ask. I think he will say, "I'll watch our stuff while you go ask."
Also I'm betting he took a few 'shortcuts' that didn't pay off.
..

Jenners said...

I think you are getting your groove on in these. Your characters are just bursting off the screen (and with so few words to make them come alive.)

karen a. said...

Is Ana sure she wants Luis to ask another guy for directions?

Michelle said...

Amen! I love it :)

Maria@BubblegumandDuctTape said...

oh no, poor Ana, men never ask for directions!

Michael G-G said...

OK, OK, I've been in clueless Luis's shoes a time or two. I admit it. Now, where am I again?

Thanks for the chuckle. Have a great week.

welcome to my world of poetry said...

Excellent, loved the read,

Yvonne.

Nessa said...

Very funny. The eternal problem between men and women. I bet they were stuck in the desert forever.

Akelamalu said...

A man ask for directions? She's more chance of winning the lottery! LOL

Angela said...

Very funny! I think I may have lived a story similar to this once or twice myself... ;)

Robyn Campbell said...

"This is way too familiar," she said as she glanced over at hubby. :) UGG. :)

Thanks for the giggle and the walk down memory lane. hehe

ninotaziz said...

Tell me the story after 6 hours...

He & Me + 3 said...

No doubt or get a GPS...LOL!

Madeleine said...

Nice one. I like your different take on the pic. :O)

bel said...

Typical! Very funny, too. :D

Hyacynth said...

Hehe. Been there. That's such a good take on that picture!
Microfiction Mondays at your place are posts I genuinely look forward to every time I see one published. You are really good at those bursts of creativity.

Paul S said...

That is very clever.
I'm a first time visitor to your blog but I'll definitely be back.

EG Wow said...

Brilliant! LOVED this!

Gerri said...

Haha!!!

Judy Croome said...

AHAHAHAHAHA! Reminds me of the first time Husband and I visited Geneva in Switzerland. He would NOT take a taxi from the station and the hotel was supposed to be ten minutes away...3 hours later we were still trundling our wheelie suitcases around the completely unknown city!!! I wasn't happy.
Judy(South Africa)