Monday, October 25, 2010

Microfiction Monday

It's Microfiction Monday over at stony river. We are invited to write a short, short story in 140 characters (including punctuation and spacing).

It was like High Noon at the picnic. Joe saw his rival for Lily’s affections. Standing tall, he used his best Gary Cooper intimidating look.

Happy Monday!

39 comments:

bel said...

Nice! I looked at the picture, read your story, looked at the picture again, and then smiled. Your story is perfect!

2 thumbs up :)

Peggy said...

I also took a double take on the picture after reading your post.
Spot On, Mom!

Have a great week and see you next time.

welcome to my world of poetry said...

Excellent, I can remember High Noon and that look.

Yvonne.

T Rex Mom said...

Great.

It just seems like a simpler time, doesn't it?

gospelwriter said...

Yes, I was thinking about that look - not to mention those ears :) - Nice MM!

WordsPoeticallyWorth said...

A lovely piece, concisely written.

Thank you. Love love, Andrew. Bye.

Diane said...

Love the western throwback! Cute one :O)

Fay's Too said...

Very fitting. Cute.

Pat said...

I think Joe's fine physique will capture Lily's attention, too. Very creative MM! I like it.

Kim said...

How fun!I hope you're having a good day Kelly!

Suz said...

hee hee I see it!
you rascal...what a funny one

Kay L. Davies said...

I dunno. Doesn't look like Gary Cooper to me, or intimidating, either. LOL

Kay, Alberta

Angela said...

Very good. I love reading these to see what you'll come up with next. :)

Ginger Jasper said...

Perfect.. Well done.. Carol and GJ x

alessandra said...

Hahaha, indeed!

Caitlin said...

I don't know how Joe could have any competition with that brooding stare and the high-waisted shorts...

Jinksy said...

I think they all look pretty intimidating - certainly not pretty! :)

Madeleine said...

LOL! Great take on the pic.:O)

Judy Croome said...

Back from the bush and catching up on blogs!

Like @bel, reading your story added a different perspective to the photo. It become so much more than a family picnic!
Judy

sylviamorice said...

Gary Cooper? Not sure about that, but I do like your take on the picture this week! Made me chuckle. Cheers!

Joanne said...

I love these. You do a great job of telling a whole story in those few words!

Ms.Daisy said...

Hi,
After reading your Western High Noon take on this picture I saw it in an entirely different light...nice work - good MM!


~Jean

Robyn Campbell said...

The pic is absolutely a GEM! :) And your words? Made me giggle. Love the intimidating look. Might I say, dang you're SO good. :) Hugs Kelly. From me and Christopher. :)

hope said...

Makes me kinda miss picnics...nice one!

Mari said...

Nice picture and I love the words!

Bill ~ {The Old Fart} said...

He does have a Gary Cooper look. I wonder if lunch was at High Noon.

Lisa Ricard Claro said...

Well, we have to give him credit for trying, don't we? I'm not sure he's pulling off Gary Cooper, but he's sure pulling something. LOL Nice take on the picture!

Petula said...

I did the double take too to check out the pic again. :-) Very nice.

Jenners said...

Well done. OF course, it would help if I saw High Noon or knew what Gary Cooper looked like!

Susan Fobes said...

A western theme-ooh! But those swim trunks are just too much...

kisatrtle said...

Clever.

The Write Girl said...

Love the short story...I've seen High Noon so I enjoyed this throw back. Nicely written.

Betty Manousos @ CUT AND DRY said...

You're so talented, Kelly.
Loved both of them. Your story and that picture!

B xx

glnroz said...

you are so good at these, bravo.

Creativity!! said...

Beautiful Fiction Dear :) :) Missing Your Poetry :( Why dont u share ur poems alternatively ??

Dan said...

It was really hot and miserable, but thankfully someone remembered the beer.

Teresha@Marlie and Me said...

I had to look up Gary Cooper and the movie before commenting. I see now that the references fit.

Susan at Stony River said...

Oh, the drama in a family picnic! LOL This one gave me a laugh, because long ago our school choir had to sing Putting on the Ritz, and as a joke on the teacher we all replaced "Gary Cooper" with "Alice Cooper" and thought we were hilarious.

'Bout as long ago as that photo.... *sigh*

Gerri said...

Good one! I love the way your mind works. ;)