Monday, October 18, 2010

Microfiction Monday


It's Microfiction Monday over at stony river. We are invited to write a short, short story in 140 characters or less (including punctuation and spacing).

The King could not keep her from the comfort of memory as she closed her eyes to chase childhood butterflies. She did not hear each brick.

Enjoy your Monday!

40 comments:

Kay L. Davies said...

Oh, nice. Much more cheerful than mine.

Kay, Alberta

Diane said...

The power of our minds.... awesome! :O)

Caroline said...

Wow...amazing the story you can create in 140 words!

Peggy said...

Mind over matter for sure.
Emotional take, tugs at my heart.

Sylvia K said...

Yep, more cheerful than mine, too! Terrific one for the day! Hope you enjoy a great week!

Sylvia

Pat said...

Mind tricks ease our pain sometimes. Poignant MfM this week. Well done!

Rigel said...

A very poetic take. "She did not hear each brick." Loved it.

sylviamorice said...

Many days I too would like to 'close my eyes to chase childhood butterflies'! Thanks for this--I loved it, even though it is sad.

Cheers!

Madeleine said...

Very profound. Sweetly chilling. :O)

Gerri said...

Fantastic imagery!!!

welcome to my world of poetry said...

Lovely words.

Have a lovely day.
Yvonne.

glnroz said...

"wow' is about all I can come up with.

Sharon said...

You took me there in 140 characters, and I'm happier for it. Lovely.

Strummed Words said...

Nice take on the photo of the king and the briklayer!

Robyn Campbell said...

Kelly, this is lovely. You take me so many places with your words. And in 140. You ARE good. Gorgeous pic too. Thanks for spreading your happiness. I needed it.

Kim said...

Wow Kelly - that is not a place I would like to be. You have a real skill for evoking strong feelings!

Thinking of you!

Michael G-G said...

Nicely written. The final line is haunting.

Have a great week.

T Rex Mom said...

Intriguing. And very deep - both your words and the photo.

Susan Fobes said...

Ah, you focused on her closed eyes-nice job!

Jane said...

Interesting and profound - all in under 140 words!

Jane

Jenners said...

I think this your best one ever. Well done!

Flory said...

"...comfort of memory..." I really like this phrase. Well done Kelly!

Marina said...

Great take, I enjoyed it!

moondustwriter said...

Glad she had a place of refuge.


Nice MFM

Have a great week

Ms.Daisy said...

"...to chase childhood memories..." Loved. it.
Wonderful take on MM.


~Jean

Creativity!! said...

To Chase childhood memories marvelous say!!!!!! Loved it :) :)

SwedishJenn said...

Love it! I loved the "childhood memories" part. So much said in that one line.

Susannah said...

Oh, I loved this. Beautifully done.

Paul C said...

You express her powerful longings so well.

lizziviggi said...

I love your take-- it's so poignant.

Betty Manousos @ CUT AND DRY said...

Love it! Wonderful! Great take!
You're crazy talented!

Big hugs!

B xx

hope said...

I'm betting she can think her way clear of this mess.

kisatrtle said...

thought provoking.

The Write Girl said...

This is beautiful Septembermom. I love the spirit of this woman and the imagery of butterflies.

Teresha@Marlie and Me said...

gorgeous prose for a gorgeous image!

Sniffles and Smiles said...

I love the final line...you turn things upside down with it...and I love this sense of defiant independence...extraordinary characterization with just a few words! Bravo!!! ~Janine XO

KB said...

So much said in a few words. Very well done.

Michelle said...

It's interesting to me that every one of these is about the woman being walled in. None is from the perspective of the waller. And none see her as being rescued. Poor girl has no control over her fate :)

Angela said...

Beautifully written, as always. It makes me think of all the wonderful memories that I am also able to cling to.

evenstarwen said...

Wow, this isso very beautiful. Fantastic!