Friday, September 10, 2010

A Flash Fiction Quickfire


I decided to put my Kelly spin on the Flash Fiction meme traveling around the blogosphere on Fridays. I thought it would be fun to try out an improv flash fiction (55 words) in response to one of my favorite paintings.

Here is what came to my mind as I thought about The Concert by Marc Chagall.


The universe swayed along with each dream that swam through her unconscious.
Nestled in her lover's warmth, the young woman felt how each scattered piece of her gravitated towards an undefined anchor. As calm began to bathe her tattered soul, the woman chose to glide towards love without allowing the darkness of insecurity to overwhelm.

So is that any good? Or should I stick with my poetry quickfires? Be honest with me, my friends. I can take it :) Hmmm, wonder if I'm sounding like a Harlequin romance writer all of a sudden. LOL.

27 comments:

WordsPoeticallyWorth said...

An apt description with deep meaning expressed with a philosophical view.

I like replenishing 'love' conquering her dark thoughts.

Thank you. Love love, Andrew. Bye.

Diane said...

Phew...... deep in only 55 words. You said a lot. :O)

Mari said...

It's good! I like the part about not allowing insecurity to overwhelm.

T Rex Mom said...

Definitely not good - AWESOME! I love it. And excellent choice in painting, too.

welcome to my world of poetry said...

As already said this was awesome and such a pleasure to read.

Yvonne.

Debbie said...

Definitely good! I loved it. Such movement and emotion.

Jillien said...

This was a beautiful piece of prose!!!! Amazing. You have a talent with words, Kelly.

Gerri said...

Kelly, I LOVE the last line. ;)

Jenners said...

It doesn't sound like a Harlequin at all!!! There was no pulsing loins or moist triangles of femininity!

septembermom said...

Jenners, you gave me quite the jolt with the imagery in your comment. LOL.

The Write Girl said...

I really enjoyed your Flash 55...it was amazing. Very nicely written. I really love the presence of art in your posts. P.S., Jenners comment is really funny.

Judy Croome said...

Love is not necessarily romantic. "glide towards love" is a powerful phrase and could mean anything e.g. could be symbolic of death. Very well done. Not easy to get so much into so few words.
Judy

Valerie said...

Gosh, I really enjoyed that. You want honesty, Kelly? OK I prefer this style of writing to the quick fire poetry. It had more style, more flair, and it enabled your words to flow with ease. It gave the reader imaginative scope, yet it was still poetic. I loved it.

bel said...

I love your poetry quickfires. And it's fun to try new things. Keep it up!

Robyn Campbell said...

You know it's good. Not only that, but the way you said it. That isn't easy. To say so much in a limited amount of words.

I've tried and failed miserably. But Kelly, my most wonderful friend, BRAVO. :)

Analisa said...

I thought it was great!

Eric J. Krause said...

Excellent! Goes very well with the paining. Well done!

Teri said...

This is wonderful. I love the positive resolution. Beautiful.

He & Me + 3 said...

I really like it. I think it was great. YOu are talented with everything you write.

Sniffles and Smiles said...

Your prose is beautifully poetic!!! Keep going!! You've really got something here!! ~Janine XO

Hyacynth said...

I liked it! It reminds of the prose that would go on a painting ... definitely not trashy romance novel material, Kelly!

Mandy's Life After 30 said...

Well I think you have the makings of poet and a romance fiction writer. I thought it was beautiful!

Michelle said...

Nahhhh... no Harlequin. There was nothing about a heavy bodice at all in there ;) Romance yes, but not quite to the Harlequin schlock :)

Susan Fobes said...

WOW-you could do romance with a bang (hmm...maybe wrong word...LOL!)

Creativity!! said...

Woww :) :)

Teresha@Marlie and Me said...

Your poem put me right in the painting...You pack a lot of poetic punch in 55 words!

Angela said...

Well done, Kelly!! I especially loved the last line, it makes me wish there was more to read! Hmm...I think you should use this, and continue with the story. I loved it. :)