Tuesday, November 3, 2009

Poetry quickfire

Slide self closer
and quiet our words
to hear the soft break
of the glass within.

Distance can trick
even the most intimate
who loosely dispense
flattery to empty air.

Engage the real
when time freezes
as the one allowed
strips a paper armor.

30 comments:

T Rex Mom said...

As always I love to read your words.

The Write Girl said...

You truly have poetic grace...love to read your words Septembermom : )

Judith Ellis said...

Lovely, Kelly. Simply lovely.

Ann Victor said...

Lyrical. Sublime. Deep. Another wonderful poem!

Sabrina said...

Wonderful. Now give us some insight....I love having poems explained!

bel said...

Beautiful, Kel!

Joanne said...

The line that does it for me is "Engage the real." Oh so true, in so many ways in life. Beautiful.

Warren Baldwin said...

Communion, intimacy, honesty, vulnerability, relationship - these are words that came to my mind when I read this. WB

Don said...

Another's Rebuttal

She thought I spoke empty flatteries --
mistaking my sincerest compliments.

Looking closer, quieter,
I discovered a glass wall...
(easily, gently shattered)

Looking closer, quieter,
(as the One allowed)
I peeled the paper armor...

Real intimacy restored.

Creativity!! said...

Woww :) :) Beautiful Lines Dear :) :) Enjoyed & Pleasure Read :) :)

Susan Fobes said...

This is short but extremely powerful!
btw: Thank your for your kind comments. I hope you consider doing music regularly too-I really enjoy your choices...

Flory said...

Love your poems! I thought of a busy couple in need of some quiet time together. I love these lines, "distance can trick even the most intimate..."

Jenners said...

You get better each week!

Michelle said...

Love it. So peaceful, then so deep. Nicely done, Kelly!

T Rex Mom said...

Any particular fabric print you would like your purse make out of? (solid, Christmas, flowers, plaid, etc.) I'm going fabric shopping this weekend. Let me know. And congratulations on winning the giveaway. Give me a few weeks to get it done.

Beth Kephart said...

This might be your best one yet.

Sneaky Momma said...

Beautiful. So calm, so quiet. :)

Life Unchartered said...

Such an elegant dance of poetic thought expressing impassioned desire in vulnerability.

Caroline said...

Truly beautiful. You are so talented.

Vicky said...

Wow, I'm a bit speechless at the quiet hum of your words :) Now I'm going to have to stick around a bit and read some more!

Thanks for your sweet comment at Sneaky Momma's on my interview!

He & Me + 3 said...

Wow that was deep, but very very good. You are way too good at this.

Gloria said...

Every word a gem . . once again. Deeply poetical and clever, so very clever!!

Thanks so much for the lovely comments you left for me during my absence. It was so very good to see that so many of you, my lovelies had come by to visit.

A fun-filled Friday to You!!

Kringle said...

Thank you for sharing the beauty of words to start my day... you warmed the heart!

Heather said...

Such flowing words :)

I thought I'd mention a blog that I've begun for all of the writer's out here in blogland. Missing Pictures, Poetry and Prose...I had to do something to encourage our writer's and photographers to come together again.

You can visit at Write With Pictures

H F W said...

For some reason it really struck me when you referred to the glass within. Sometimes I feel like my heart is made of glass. Very powerful, Kelly.

kisatrtle said...

love it!

Fresh Mommy said...

Oh, love it for sure! So intimate and real :)

Suzyhayze said...

I love that.... paper armor. Just right.

Amias said...

Oh this is so good; real. I especially love the first stanza!

"Slide self closer
and quiet our words
to hear the soft break
of the glass within."

Andrea Frazer - Pass the Zoloft said...

I like the last stanza. Beautifully written. I also applaud you for raising 4 kids! I have two and am pretty busy with that. Found you through Susan's blog.